This is an older poem I think I had on here but I made some slight changes and wanted to get some more feedback.
As always, comments and concerns are highly encouraged and insanely appreciated!
Specific questions for critique:
1) Does breaking the "I've given up...anything else" into it's own stanza add a bigger punch? It was previously part of the first stanza?
2) Should the second stanza even exist? Is it effective?
3) Does this elicit any sort of emotional response?
4) Lastly, your own comments/critiques/concerns. I find these are often most helpful.