Had the first line of this poem in my brain for quite some time and finally think I got something decent out of it.
As always, your comments and critiques are invaluable to me.
Critique for TheWrittenRevolution: thewrittenrevolution.deviantar…
Questions for Critique:
1) Does the second stanza add enough to the poem to warrant it being there?
2) Does the imagery in the first stanza work?
3) Is there anything you would add?
4) Is there anything you would remove?
5) Any other general comments you have?